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Post by skyfang12 on Aug 8, 2008 18:58:23 GMT -5
Summerclan
Leader:Goldenstar(M)
Deputy:Snowstorm(M)
Warrior(s): Leopardpelt(F) Tigerfoot(M) Lionheart(F) Petalnose(F) Iceface(M) Thunderfoot(M) Foxheart(F) Rosenose(F) Petaltail(F) Honeypelt(F) Darkcloud(M) Volespring(F) Stoneclaw(M) Mossnose(F) Thrushwing(F) Webclaw(M) Swifttail(M)
Queen(s): Swiftfoot(F)
Apprentice(s): Whitepaw(F) Owlpaw(M)
Elder(s):
Kit(s): Spottedkit(F)
Medicine Cat:Bramblestorm(M) Apprentice:Lightningpaw(M)
Autumnclan
Leader:Shadestar(F)
Deputy:Flameclaw(M)
Warrior(s): Nightswirl(F) Blackstorm(M) Cedarpelt(M) Spiderclaw(M) Rippedclaw(F) Duskpool(F) Blossomheart(F) Snaketail(M) Appletail(F) Boulderfoot(M) Ashfur(M) Brighttail(F)
Queens(s): Shadowclaw(F)
Apprentice(s): Moonpaw(F) Smokepaw(M)
Elder(s):
Kit(s): Raggedkit(M) Jaggedkit(M) Dawnkit(F)
Medicine cat:Brighttail(F) Apprentice:Lizardpaw(F)
Winterclan
Leader: Runningstar
Deputy: Greypelt
Warrior(s): Thornclaw(M) Rainface(F) Spottedfoot(M) Firepelt(M) Littlefoot(M) Bluestripe(F) Windypelt(M) Tallears(M) Heathertail(F) Grayheart(F)
Queen(s): Iceheart(F)
Apprentice(s): Foxpaw(M) Applepaw(F) Leafpaw(F)
Elder(s): Whitestorm(M)
Kit(s): Rabbitkit(F) Volekit(M)
Medicine cat: Leafclaw(F) Apprentice: Icepaw(F)
Springclan
Leader:Sootstar(M)
Deputy:Sloefur(M)
Warrior(s): Marshfoot(F) Oakheart(M) Greenflower(F) Dewleaf(F) Whitemist(M) Reedwhisker(M) Frostfoot(F) Oakfur(F) Ripplepelt(F) Eaglepelt(M) Stripedfur(M) Shelltail(F)
Queen(s):
Apprentice(s): Beetlepaw(M) Grasspaw(F) Pricklepaw(M) Bristlepaw(F) Mistpaw(F)
Elder(s):
Kit(s):
Medicine Cat:IvyCloud(F) Apprentice:Minnowpelt(M)
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Post by Kiki on Aug 8, 2008 19:03:53 GMT -5
This is a bit messy. You might want to give each warrior their own line and perhaps put short appearances. Example. I know everyone has their own way of doing alligences, but this is just messy. Mind you I'm not trying to be mean. Sorry if it seems that way. The way I give constructive criticism is just extremely straight to the point and blunt. >>
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Post by skyfang12 on Aug 8, 2008 19:37:05 GMT -5
Ok I fixed it
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Post by Kiki on Aug 8, 2008 19:37:50 GMT -5
That looks better.
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Post by skyfang12 on Aug 8, 2008 19:40:14 GMT -5
Thanks
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